Wednesday, March 30, 2011

Moon in the ocean

I see the moon reflecting off of the deep dark depths of the ocean. Who knows what lurks in that so called ocean.I see its craters so vividly done that it feels like I am standing on the moon.I see the reflection of the moon on a blue whales barnacle covered back,dotted with specks of silver water.Looking like it could cost millions of dollars.It looks like it is in a sea with never ending stars,in a life full of happiness and enjoyment.
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  1. JohnsonMarch 30, 2011 at 7:32 PM

    I loved it! I loved the alliteration deep dark depths did you mean to do that alliteration? From your friend Darius

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  2. JohnsonMarch 31, 2011 at 5:02 PM

    Hello Shubhanjali,

    I love your use of alliteration like Darius stated. You used lots of great words "specks of silver water" and " blue whales barnacle covered back".
    You did a great job on your poem, I recognized "deep, dark, depths" from my moms poem that I shared. (but I know you didn't copy).
    Anyway great job. Love Maile

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  3. JohnsonMay 8, 2011 at 7:58 PM

    Darius I did that on purpose.-Shub

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